Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
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that teenager should spend their spare in useful ways like doing a part-time job, while, other believes that Change the verb form
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, will explore my own opinion, in turn.
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they can attain some fund or even improve their skills based on their own interest. Correct your spelling
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For example
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on
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learn
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Therefore
, indulging youngsters Linking Words
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in
temproary
works is highly advantageous.
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temporary
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that an individual at Change the verb form
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teenage
age
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academics
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,not
odd-jobs
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odd jobs
In addition
, no one can guarantee that Linking Words
children
might like that part-time work, Use synonyms
also
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the possibility
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For instance
, according to a survey conducted by the Chronicle-journal in 2014, the literacy rate is very low, as Linking Words
children
often prefer to be involved in Use synonyms
family
business rather Add an article
the family
go
to school. Ergo, teenagers should concentrate on their academics until they finish their studies.
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than go
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that relatively younger Change preposition
at
age
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doesn't
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