Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.

In our overall live period, being a teenager might be the most
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part. Though, many
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that teenager should spend their spare in useful ways like doing a part-time job, while, other believes that
children
should concentrate on studies.
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delves into both vantage points,
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, will explore my own opinion, in turn. On the one hand, the contenders of the context that states that teenagers should work
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part-time, be absolutely right? Certainly, because at that stage of
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they can attain some fund or even improve their skills based on their own interest.
For example
, in countries like India, parents encourage their
children
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their
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skills related to the family's source of income.
As a result
, at that young
age
, awareness and new ideas to improvise the business will prevail among youngsters which perhaps lead them to become successful.
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works is highly advantageous.
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that an individual at
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should
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on
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on
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.
In addition
, no one can guarantee that
children
might like that part-time work,
also
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of losing
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education is
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concern
.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted by the Chronicle-journal in 2014, the literacy rate is very low, as
children
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business rather
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to school. Ergo, teenagers should concentrate on their academics until they finish their studies. To conclude, I reiterate that afterall going to
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doesn't
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seem to be
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point. Personally,
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any
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if they want to, but at
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they mustn't lose
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their
the
love for studies. Because without educational knowledge we cannot compete with
this
competitive world.
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