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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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The notion concerning testing on
animals
 seems to trigger a considerable debate. A cluster of like-minded people
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 that
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majority
 of wild
animals
 suffering from experiments so government must be banned
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kimd
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kind
 of activities.others,
however
, take a dim view on it and observe that if doctors tested new experiments on
animals
 that would be more
benefical
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beneficial
 for human beings. The upcoming paragraphs will analyse both twain side
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of
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my view . The opponents of
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view point
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 opine that animal testing
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big
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obstecal
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obstacle
 for
animals
 .To explain it, in
modern
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 era, testing on
animals
 boosting day by day but
animals
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also
 right to live a
freedom
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life like
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 humans as well as there are so many species nowadays on
extiction
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extinction
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point
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tiger
trigger
 and lion and so on.
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, everybody
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 to save
lives
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 of
animals
beacuse
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because
 everything important on earth.
secondly
, if forest wild
animals
 extinct , it can be put cast an adverse effect on
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environment
beacuse
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because
 of
animals
also
 a part of
food
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 chain so
authorties
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authorities
 should safe the
life
 of
animals
.
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, another side
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 that due to
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 of
huaman
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human
life
 testing might
be became
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 more crucial nowadays .To elaborate it, advancement of technology every single day new health hazards become a big problem for
peolple
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people
 so if doctors want to make new medicine for
public
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 , they have to experiments on
animals
 to develop
latest
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 medication for any ailment .
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 50%
new
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 health issues come in
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today's epoch that's why
scientest
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scientists
scientist
 need to make new medicine for those problems.
Thus
, saving the
life
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 of humans
first
prority
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priority
 of
goverments
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governments
 so testing on
animals
 very
neccesory
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necessary
accessory
 . At
last
, it can be summed up , no doubt both
side
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 convincing arguments and
wild
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wildlife
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life
also
 important but
development
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the development
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 of new good medical products
also
 very crucial for
ecehlons
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echelons
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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