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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think this is a good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 must be banned that
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side
 believes that due to the safety of human
life
 testing might become more crucial nowadays .To elaborate , advancement of technology every single
day
 new
health
 hazards become a big problem for
people
 so if
doctors
 want to make new
medicine
 for the public , they have to
experiments
 on the
beast
 to develop the latest medication for any ailment .
For instance
, a survey reveals that in India 50% of new
health
 issues come in today's epoch that's why scientists need to make new
medicine
 for those problems.
Thus
, saving the
lives
 of
humans
first
 priority of governments so testing on
creature
 very necessary . At
last
, it can be summed up , no doubt
both
 sides convincing arguments and wildlife
life
also
 important but the development of new good medical products
also
 very crucial for echelons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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