Many people say that we now live in ‘consumer societies’ where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that consumer culture has played a vital role in improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Consumerism
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grants
people
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a taste of the good
life
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. Obviously, it is
also
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engaged with material possession, earning
money
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and social status in
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apply
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society.
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, some
people
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believe that
consumer
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culture might bring
vital
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a vital
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role in order to
improving
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improve
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lives.
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this
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is true, in my
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good
life
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could not potentially affect by
consumer
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culture.
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,
Consumerism
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has several positives which are engaged with
happy
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a happy
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life
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.
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, happy
life
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which is marked as acquire prestigious items or
money
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may force
people
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to work hard
for
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to
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increase their earnings. Thereby, creativity and innovation are flooding in their head as a motivational drive to earn more
money
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.
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, the owner of
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an online
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shop who really wants to buy
iPhone
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an iPhone
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uses several innovations in order to raise her sale.
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, the power of
consumerism
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also
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affects trading among countries and
then
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consecutively increases national domestic income.
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, demanding
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for
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Japan
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Japanese
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vehicles might rise export and
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encourages
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economics
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economic
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condition.
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, those explanations above mentioned that
consumerism
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is
stance
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a stance
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for
live
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life
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improving.
On the contrary
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, good living is not always linear with
consumerism
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. Some
people
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are willing to be selfish and unaware with
surrounds
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surroundings
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. They may guide their behaviour to satisfy pleasure with unlimited.
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act makes them
as
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apply
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victim
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a victim
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of their act; certain it is followed by
unhappiness
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unhappy
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feeling.
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, chronic shopaholics never feel satisfied
of
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with
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their buying
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they already shop for doubled even tripled in a month.
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, highly concerned about
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what
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needed might causes
people
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less care
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about
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the
environment
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environmental
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condition. They do not aware and think to spend their
money
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for charity or donation for humanity probably.
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, the impact, good and bad, of
consumer
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society might probably coin as
human
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a human
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choice for their live improving. I believe that every person already
take
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takes
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highly consideration before
dive
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diving
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into
consumer
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culture.
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