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As housing is a basic need for people, the government should provide free housing for everyone who can’t afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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's need for a place to live is often considered as something
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 not important in Indonesian society today.
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 is clear from the
government
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's policy of letting housing prices run out of control – and there is no real direction for change. I agree if the
government
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 thinks about ​​providing free housing for
people
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 who cannot afford it. There are three reasons for my
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 for poor
people
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: efficiency, humanity, and economic reasons. The
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 consideration at
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 time is efficiency, whereas to reach workplaces in the city
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;
people
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 can only afford to buy a place to live in the suburbs, which is 2 to 3 hours from the city
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.
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 is very inefficient considering that
people
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 will have to spend 4 to 5 hours every day on public transportation. If the
government
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 provides free or subsidized housing, so the costs are low,
people
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 will not have to waste 5 hours per day, and they will be more productive. My
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argument
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 of
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 policy is the humanitarian
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. Certain
people
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 with
meager
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 incomes and who do not have the skills for permanent work must be fostered and managed humanely to maintain their degree and dignity. For groups of
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 like
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, special housing with supervision must still be developed in strategic areas but not in the city
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. With special supervision and routine guidance, the housing facilities provided will be maintained, new economic
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 will be formed while reducing the crime rate. My closing
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 is economic reasons.
People
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 like Indonesia today need peace in carrying out all the joints of the wheel of life. If
people
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 find it challenging to find affordable housing, life will be more chaotic and disorderly.
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, in turn, will result in economic stagnation and increased social unrest. It is not an exaggeration to make special rules to convert land and managed it into a property for the poor because it does not need luxury but only needs shelter to avoid the rain and hot sun. In conclusion, all problems, when thought about wisely, will get a solution.
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,
people
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's housing, more a matter of funding allocation than anything else, needs political willingness from the
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 and is not a complicated problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Basic need
  • Affordable housing
  • Social contract
  • Taxpayer burden
  • Social equity
  • Dependency
  • Incentives
  • Financial self-improvement
  • Underprivileged
  • Government assistance
  • Inequality reduction
  • Social mobility
  • Housing subsidies
  • Human right
  • Obligation
  • Safe housing
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