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As housing is a basic need for people, the government should provide free housing for everyone who can’t afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
's need for a place to live is often considered as something
that is
 not important in Indonesian society today.
This
 is clear from the
government
's policy of letting housing prices run out of control – and there is no real direction for change. I agree if the
government
 thinks about ​​providing free housing for
people
 who cannot afford it. There are three reasons for my
argument
 for poor
people
: efficiency, humanity, and economic reasons. The
first
 consideration at
this
 time is efficiency, whereas to reach workplaces in the city
center
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;
people
 can only afford to buy a place to live in the suburbs, which is 2 to 3 hours from the city
center
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.
This
 is very inefficient considering that
people
 will have to spend 4 to 5 hours every day on public transportation. If the
government
 provides free or subsidized housing, so the costs are low,
people
 will not have to waste 5 hours per day, and they will be more productive. My
second
argument
 in
favor
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 of
this
 policy is the humanitarian
argument
. Certain
people
 with
meager
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 incomes and who do not have the skills for permanent work must be fostered and managed humanely to maintain their degree and dignity. For groups of
people
 like
this
, special housing with supervision must still be developed in strategic areas but not in the city
center
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. With special supervision and routine guidance, the housing facilities provided will be maintained, new economic
centers
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 will be formed while reducing the crime rate. My closing
argument
 is economic reasons.
People
 like Indonesia today need peace in carrying out all the joints of the wheel of life. If
people
 find it challenging to find affordable housing, life will be more chaotic and disorderly.
This
, in turn, will result in economic stagnation and increased social unrest. It is not an exaggeration to make special rules to convert land and managed it into a property for the poor because it does not need luxury but only needs shelter to avoid the rain and hot sun. In conclusion, all problems, when thought about wisely, will get a solution.
Likewise
,
people
's housing, more a matter of funding allocation than anything else, needs political willingness from the
government
 and is not a complicated problem.
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