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The plans below show the site of an airport now and hpw it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The representation details the improvements Southwest Airport is bound to undergo in the following year. Looking from a general perspective, it is readily apparent that there will be more and more facilities,
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 improving
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 experience. Going more into detail, it is evident that the gates will increase from 8 to 18,
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 boosting the number of flights taking off and landing at the airport.
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 the project, a sky train will replace the walkway as
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 of transport linking the various gates. It is
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 worth noticing that both the departures and the arrivals will become more accessible thanks to two additional entrances.
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, as far as the departures terminal is concerned, the check-in area will be moved to the upper right side,
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 the café will be transferred
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 the left near the entrances. Next to it, a new bag drop area will be added.
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, after passing security and passport control,
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 will have the chance of mooching around some new shops.
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, the arrivals will be improved by adding an ATM point and a café on the right side. There will
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 be an area where tourists coming into town will be able to hire cars.
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Consider using more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and maintain the reader's interest.
structure
Ensure that there’s a clear and distinct conclusion to summarize the main points discussed in the essay.
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Avoid repetition of certain words or phrases; try using synonyms or rephrasing for better cohesion.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the task, effectively summarizing the main features of the airport's redevelopment.
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Main points are well-supported with specific details from the plans, showing a good grasp of the information presented.
coherence and cohesion
There is a logical progression of ideas, aiding in overall coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay successfully outlines the significant improvements and features to highlight customer experience enhancement.

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