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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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There was the time when tourists prefer to travel to that
places
, where they could enjoy
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relaxation and able to escape from their hectic schedules, while nowadays, people want to visit those
places
, where they could
ventures
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 and face many challenges
such
 as travelling in the Sahara desert or the Antarctic,
instead
 of luxurious and relaxing, now whether it carries benefits or having numerous risks,
this
 will
further
 concern in the coming paragraphs. After the rise of social media, many people start affectation behaviour, where they start posting a number of pretentious photos that creates enormous
of
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insecurities, where for increasing the likes and comments
in
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 Instagram and Facebook, many of them decide to travel
dangerous
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 or challenging
places
 because of their adulation towards surging the fake popularity in social
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medias
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. Whilst, there are unique people, who
wants
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 to experience something that no one ever
dare
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.
Therefore
, they decide to travel
places
such
 as
North
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 or South Pole, where they are never going
think
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 twice.
Also
, if they are asked to swim in a
freeze
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 pond,
then
also
 they are not going to hesitate. Another instance,
number
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 of tourists go
to climb
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the
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Mount Everest, despite knowing
about
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that it can cost their life. In conclusion, travelling in
the
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dangerous
places
, for instances, venturing
in
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 the abyss caves or walking in the dense forests, can make your journey the most memorable and helps in having
never ending
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 excitement,
in contrast
,
this
 can cost heavy to your life. Nowadays, teenagers are having fun, where they successfully able to capture great adventures in their smartphones
,
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 and get famous, but mostly,
such
 travels
also
 are the biggest cause of rocketing the deaths rate.
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