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Write about the following topic: Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #schools #government
Of late, private institutes should receive
government
 funding to continue their services in a significant part of the world. A sea change has been witnessed in private
schools
 having high demand due to
this
 fees was arise. The following paragraphs would explain possible reasons with example. To commence with the reasons
first
 and foremost is private organizations having a lot of demands in the contemporary era to increasing student count and expand the infrastructure.
Secondly
, to include extra activities for children's development
schools
 needs
government
 support.
For example
, If an institute conducts any kind of event to improve the student ability or enhance study structure in
school
. So, they need money and need
government
 funding to execute. Adding
further
 a few more reasons, Daycare or child care need
government
 funding and authorization to run a smooth business and help the parents to take care of their children when they are away or going to work.
Similarly
, primary
schools
also
 need some kind of help from the leaders to expand the
school
 classes from primary to the middle,
this
 will help the children to continue in the same
school
 without losing their utmost important time to switching
schools
.
For instance
, a small kid
first
 joins daycare after
sometime
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 the daycare facilities extended to primary education than middle with the support of
government
 while he continues his education in the same
school
 till middle class without losing or gapping in his study. In conclusion, I would like to state that
government
 should support
the
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private institution to continue their journey to provide the best class education facility to students.
Submitted by Chandan Kumar Singh on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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