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Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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task response
Score: 4. The main topic is not answered. The essay has only a plan, with many blank parts. Write clear ideas about both mixed schools and separate schools. Give your own view and explain why.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. The order is clear: start, first view, other view, and end. However, the blank parts stop the ideas from joining well. Use linking words such as 'because', 'for example', 'however', and 'as a result' with full ideas.
task response
To get a higher score, use real examples. For example, say how boys and girls may learn to work together in the same school, or how separate schools may help some students focus.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main idea. Start with the idea, then give a reason, an example, and the result. Do not repeat the same point in the end.
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You have included both sides of the question and a place for your own view.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part shape: start, one side, the other side, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use useful joining words, such as 'Firstly', 'However', 'For instance', and 'To conclude'.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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