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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
In a contemporary world, not only positive aspects increase. Recently, more garbage has been produced by people regardless
where
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of where
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 they live. In
this
 essay, I will outline some reasons that support
this
 topic and
also
, I will discuss some solutions which may help governments tackling
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, the population is growing and inevitably the rubbish that everyone produces daily. It happens because each
person
 has necessities
which
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 contribute to augment the amount of trash. It is a proportional rise. Another important point is that the more shopping a
person
 does,
more
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the more
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 waste they produce. Consumerism has increased enormously in a manner that
it
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is not proportional to the amount of growing population. One good example is online shopping which all items must be well packaged for shipping and undoubtedly it uses more plastic.
Then
, if a
person
 shops more, they will have more rubbish. Fortunately, there are some solutions to dwindle these issues. One of them is that governments need to invest more money
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 improving recycling methods.
Therefore
, more industries will be capable to support a country’s necessity and
additionally
, they can contribute
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 better solutions once they receive certain support.
Furthermore
, a short-term action would be having more taxes for all kinds of packaging.
Thus
, each place where provides bags for customers or stores that use several materials to deliver an item,
they
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will pass
this
 expense to the final customer. Once a
person
 feels that they are being financially impacted, they might change their behaviour.
Hence
 to conclude, worldwide population is growing and with that, the daily waste these people produce. Unfortunately,
this
 growth is challenging to handle, but the State can interfere and help
solving
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this
 matter by investing more in innovative recycling ways and taxing more the usage of plastic bags.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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