Many people join distance-learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, there are available online

classes

in colleges, universities or schools. some public believe that

students

can't learn easily in online

classes

as well as they will face many problems. I slightly see eye to eye to the given statement and will my present view to the upcoming paragraph. In order to justify my point of view, I would like to pen down that, there are huge benefits of online

classes

and some disadvantages.

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nawadays

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nowadays

, people are

very

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a very

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busy lifestyle even

students

also

busy in

their

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there

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. personal work. If online

classes

will be available in

education

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the education

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center

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then

they can save their time.

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, one

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of my

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friend is living in

village

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the village

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, it's

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far from school. He can not

come

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everyday school. it's tremoundsly hard to him. If online

classes

will provide a school

then

it will easy for him.

However

, in online

classes

students

can ask frequently question

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teacher

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the teacher

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Sometime

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student

feel

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hsitate

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hesitate

classroom

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the classroom

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because they do not want any question in

classroom

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the classroom

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However

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apply

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nowadays, there are many

students

who like using

computer

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a computer

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, so they can show their

intrest

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interest

in their study. The

intrest

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interest

is one of the

most good

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effecton

study

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studies

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. on

other hand

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, there is a famous dictum " one man's trash is

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another man's treasure"

likewise

, some people think that online

classes

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not

best

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the best

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idea for

students

because they can't mentally or physically present in class.

Moreover

, teachers

also

can't teach properly to them. In nutshell, it can be said that as "every coin has two sides" in the same way

this

topic has both aspects having individual value and neither of them can be said wrong but still, my point of view is more significant for me.

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