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Many people join distance-learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #programs #study #post #tv #internet #home #benefit #colleges #universities
In the contemporary era, there are available online
classes
 in colleges, universities or schools. some public believe that
students
 can't learn easily in online
classes
 as well as they will face many problems. I slightly see eye to eye to the given statement and will my present view to the upcoming paragraph. In order to justify my point of view, I would like to pen down that, there are huge benefits of online
classes
 and some disadvantages.
In
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nawadays
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nowadays
, people are
very
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a very
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 busy lifestyle even
students
also
 busy in
their
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there
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. personal work. If online
classes
 will be available in
education
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the education
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center
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then
 they can save their time.
For example
, one
my
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of my
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 friend is living in
village
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the village
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, it's
to
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too
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 far from school. He can not
come
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 everyday school. it's tremoundsly hard to him. If online
classes
 will provide a school
then
 it will easy for him.
However
, in online
classes
,
students
 can ask frequently question
to
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teacher
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the teacher
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.
Sometime
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 student
feel
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hsitate
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hesitate
 in
classroom
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the classroom
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 because they do not want any question in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
However
,
in
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nowadays, there are many
students
 who like using
computer
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a computer
the computer
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, so they can show their
intrest
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interest
 in their study. The
intrest
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interest
 is one of the
most good
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 effecton
study
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studies
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. on
other hand
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, there is a famous dictum " one man's trash is
a
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 another man's treasure"
likewise
, some people think that online
classes
is
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 not
best
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the best
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 idea for
students
 because they can't mentally or physically present in class.
Moreover
, teachers
also
 can't teach properly to them. In nutshell, it can be said that as "every coin has two sides" in the same way
this
 topic has both aspects having individual value and neither of them can be said wrong but still, my point of view is more significant for me.
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