Many people join distance-learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary era, there are available online
classes
in colleges, universities or schools. some public believe that
students
can't learn easily in online
classes
as well as they will face many problems. I slightly see eye to eye to the given statement and will my present view to the upcoming paragraph. In order to justify my point of view, I would like to pen down that, there are huge benefits of online
classes
and some disadvantages.
In
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nawadays
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nowadays
, people are
very
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busy lifestyle even
students
also
busy in
their
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. personal work. If online
classes
will be available in
education
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center
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then
they can save their time.
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, one
my
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friend is living in
village
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the village
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, it's
to
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far from school. He can not
come
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everyday school. it's tremoundsly hard to him. If online
classes
will provide a school
then
it will easy for him.
However
, in online
classes
,
students
can ask frequently question
to
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teacher
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the teacher
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.
Sometime
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student
feel
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hsitate
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hesitate
in
classroom
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the classroom
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because they do not want any question in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
However
,
in
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nowadays, there are many
students
who like using
computer
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a computer
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, so they can show their
intrest
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interest
in their study. The
intrest
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interest
is one of the
most good
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effecton
study
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. on
other hand
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, there is a famous dictum " one man's trash is
a
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another man's treasure"
likewise
, some people think that online
classes
is
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not
best
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idea for
students
because they can't mentally or physically present in class.
Moreover
, teachers
also
can't teach properly to them. In nutshell, it can be said that as "every coin has two sides" in the same way
this
topic has both aspects having individual value and neither of them can be said wrong but still, my point of view is more significant for me.
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