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People nowadays are not as fit and active as they were in the past. What are the reasons for this? What measures can be taken for this?

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In the
last
 decades,
people
 have gradually become more sedentary, at the same time, obesity affects an important percentage of the population. In the following short essay, the reasons for
this
 and some possible solutions will be addressed.
To begin
, sedentarism and overweight issues are narrowly connected. In the
last
 half of the 20th
century
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 the global economy switched from hard labour to services and information
techologies
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technologies
. Having said that, nowadays, more and more
people
 work behind a desk without having to do any kind of physical activity.
Moreover
, the fast-
food
 industry has increased dramatically and has changed the eating patterns
especially
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 in the western world.
For example
, one century ago, an average worker stayed for more than eight hours a day
in
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 a farm and used to eat fresh
food
,
in contrast
, currently, the same person gests sitted eight hours in an office and
has
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 breakfast and
luch
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lunch
 in a restaurant full of ultra-processed
food
. Since obesity has turned into a public health problem, one feasible solution might come from local
goverments
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governments
government
, they should increase
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
 of awareness against the low-activity way of life and all its risks. Politicians can take direct actions against the
availabilty
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availability
 of fast
food
 by increasing the taxes to those companies. Maybe, if more data related to the negative consequences of poor eating
choises
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choices
 mixed with low activity habits were exposed in public media,
people
 would be more careful of their daily life.
For instance
, parents will
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 if
a
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soda is a suitable
bevarage
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beverage
 for their children if they knew that sugar is highly related to
diabethes
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diabetes
 and
kindney
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kidney
 issues. To conclude, the main reason for
people
 being less fit and active than older generations
,
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may be
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maybe
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 the dangerous combination of low-quality
food
 and sedentarism. In order to mitigate
this
 issue,
goverments
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governments
government
 can publish campaigns to reduce the
comsumption
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consumption
 of bad
food
 and improve the habits of their population.
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