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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects of this on society and families?

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Most
couples
 these days would rather not
to
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have
children
 until they are older.
This
 can be because of several different reasons.
This
 decision has its impact on societies, which we will look into in
this
 essay. Cultural and economical restraints play a huge role. In the
last
 couple of decades, the number of women attending full-time jobs has risen rapidly, while stay-at-home men are still frowned upon by some. In
this
 cultural dilemma, neither the wife nor the husband can look after their
children
 and raise them responsibly.
On the other hand
,
couples
 generally believe that they must enjoy a certain level of family income in order to afford
feeding
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 an extra mouth. These might persuade
couples
 into thinking of having
children
 when one of them is present at home and they are financially more stable. Late childbearing can lead to some notable gaps between parents and their offspring and
also
 an
aging
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 population. As
couples
 decide to have
children
 later in their life, a noticeable age gap begins to appear,
as a result
 of that, communication between
children
 and their parents might suffer some damages. Being from different generations, it is only natural to have opposing views on many subjects.
Furthermore
, it disturbs the balance among
variety
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 of age groups, which could contribute to
scarcity
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the scarcity
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 of workforce, and problems recompensating the growing number of retired employees. Late childbearing is a growing trend and it has
some
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certain outcomes in the near future, societies must be aware of there and take action if necessary.
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