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'We have an expression: food is not love'. Obesity these days is very common in our society. Some people believe our overeating habit and less physical exercise have left obese people to suffer from various illnesses. Discuss the solutions to remain fit.

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Obesity means an excess amount of body fat. Today,
this
 disease is increasing day by day in our community. It is a medical problem that increases the risk of other diseases like- blood pressure, sugar, heart problems, and cancer. In
this
 essay, I would like to enlighten my views on the given subject. In the
first
 place, obesity is caused by
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
excess
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excessive
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 amounts of junk food. In the past, people did not have much variety of foods. They rely more on
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homemade
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home made
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homemade
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 food but today there are numerous options in the market like
italian
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Italian
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,
chinese
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, continental, and many more. People love the
consumption
 of these meals and they are compounded by a higher level of fats and sugar which makes them obese.
Then
, the other reason is the lack of exercises, spending too much amount on sitting,
for instance
, watching television, playing video games, and extended working hours without any exercises are the causes for gaining weight. There are several solutions to prevent obesity. What is important to achieve
this
 target is self-discipline towards eating patterns and resolution to form a diet and fitness regime every day.
Furthermore
,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of organic food ,
it
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apply
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might be costly but not compared to the medical bills.
In addition
 to
this
, use out hours by doing exercise
instead
 of suffering on the internet. In a nutshell, The Mantra “ Health is Wealth” can be used to supply awareness by doing exercise and
consumption
 of a better diet to make the people fit.
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