The government's investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

One of the main
task
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of a
government
is to make a budget for their
country
. Depending on the circumstances and needs of the people money is allocated for different categories. There is no doubt that public services,
such
as hospitals and schools are important for any
country
, but at the same
time
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other sectors like arts, music and theatre are equally important. I completely disagree with the statement that the sitting
government
should not invest in these areas.
To begin
with, the
first
major benefit of investment in
entertainment
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the entertainment
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sector is that
this
reflects
culture
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the culture
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and the ethos of a
country
.
This
is because folk songs, movies
is
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are
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a way of
teaching
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nation
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the nation
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history of their forefathers. With governments' support,
this
industry
can flourish and provide an incentive for the artists.
For instance
, during the war 1965 India Pakistan
war
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local traditional singers went to the warzone and performed on the borders to
boast
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boost
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the morale of the soldiers.
This
strategy was extremely
helful
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helpful
in reviving nationalism in the soldiers. Another important advantage is that
bigscreens
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big screens
big screen
and stage can bring
toursists
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tourists
to a
country
, which, in turn, can contribute significantly to the national economy.
In addition
,
government's
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patronage of
this
industry
will promote
soft
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image of the
country
. To illustrate, people from over the world who love rap music visit the United States to attend concerts.
This
activity generates
a
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heavy revenue for the
government
.
Conversely
, if
this
important
industry
is neglected altogether it may result in loss of economic opportunity. In conclusion, personally, I believe
public
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sector is important but we cannot neglect the significance of
arts
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the arts
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and entertainment
industry
as it promotes
country's
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the country's
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culture and generates revenue for the nation.
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