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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that type of progress are equally important

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On the one hand, having a growing
economy
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 may lead to progression in
countries
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 and governments should put their effort into fulfilling their economical achievements. Developed nations which have a high level of industrialization, their governments are more able to establish
state- of –
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the- art
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 facilities for their society.
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, the inhabitants of these
countries
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 are less likely to face some
problems
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such
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lack
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 of medicines.
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, in some
countries
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 like Africa which have economical
problems
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, people always die due to health
problems
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.
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,
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economy
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economic
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 progression usually
lead
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leads
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 to
low
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a low
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 unemployment rate.
Countries
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 with good infrastructure provide their residents with the golden opportunity to find a high paid job because companies generally are not under financial
problems
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.
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, there are lots of industrialized
countries
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 where have
a social
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social problems
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problems
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.
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 in America, people are allowed to use a gun in public places. Many tourists and natives usually do not feel safe.
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, when it comes to morality, people are more satisfied when they live in
countries
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 with a fair system.
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,
female
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a female
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 who live in Arab
countries
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 where have a good
economy
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 generally do not feel happy because there are some gender discriminations. Safe societies and equality are some factors
which
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that
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 have a profound effect on
countries
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 progress. In conclusion, from my
perspective
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although
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economy
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the economy
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 help
countries
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 to develop, other factors
such
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az
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as
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behavioral
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behavioural
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 issues and social issues are as important as
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economy
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the economy
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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