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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Wild
animals
 being kept in
zoos
 is a very controversial issue.
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 discusses
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 I will give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the
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 there are people who believe that wild
animals
 should never be kept captive. The main reason for believing
that is
 because keeping wild
animals
 in a confined space, outside their natural habitat, can be quite cruel to them.
Animals
 often suffer to adapt to captive life, some cannot adapt at all and end up dying. Another reason is
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 exploiting
animals
 and thinking only about the profits is not morally right. A good example is
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 traditional photo holding
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koala offered by every zoo in Australia. The poor animal is held by hundreds of tourists every day just so the zoo can make money.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. Some people feel that having
zoos
 can be justifiable. People defend
this
 opinion arguing that taking children to a zoo is the best way to educate them about
animals
 and wildlife. It can help the young ones to develop love and admiration for the
animals
. A
second
 point is that
zoos
 can help to preserve endangered species by promoting awareness and by raising money for their preservation. In my opinion, both points of view have their merits. On balance
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, I tend to believe that wild
animals
 should not be kept in
zoos
 because it is cruel to them and
also
 because I think there should be different ways to educate children and preserve endangered species.
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