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It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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University
education
 plays a vital role in the development of an individual and the overall economic progress of a nation. Most of the countries offer high
education
 to the students who perform as expected in their exams.
Nevertheless
, I totally agree that it is practically impossible to guarantee everyone admission in the
university
, and there are other professions that are as important as Bachelor's or Master's degree.
To begin
 with, having a high level of
university
 graduate will create unemployment. When someone works hard in their academia they would not settle down for low paying jobs, and
as a result
, a
country
 will have a high number of unemployed graduates.
For example
, in Pakistan, the private sector has enrolled students with poor educational background, as long as they can pay their tuition fee.
This
, in turn, has produced low-quality students who consider themselves overqualified for low paying jobs.
As a result
, the
country
 suffers from a
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 jobless task force.
In addition
, the countries are entrusted with the duty to spend their funds wisely. For
this
 reason, the government has a limited resource of money, which is expected to be spent wisely. It is
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 impossible and sheer waste of money, for any government, to allocate a colossal amount of money for higher
education
 alone. There are other professions and technical institutes, which are equally important as
university
education
.
For instance
, Australia is a wealthy
country
, even in
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 it is not considered wise to allow every Australian citizen to have a high level of
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university
 qualification.
That is
 why they are spending on technical
education
, which has benefited the Australian economy. In conclusion, I sincerely feel, it is not possible not needed for everyone to have a
university
 degree, there are other occupations that are as important as a
university
 degree for the development of a
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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