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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife , while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Wildlife conservation is essential to maintain the food chain in the ecosystem.
thus
, it is important for human survival.
Besides
 protecting these species there are a number of other issues which need to addressed with top priority. We will be discussing some of these problems in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, global warming is one of the biggest threat to living organisms on the earth. The rapid climatic change in
varoius
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various
 parts of the world has led to mass extinction on the planet.
For instance
, Global warming is solely responsible for melting ice in the artic and the antarctic leading to
drop
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 in the number of polar bears
other
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 habitats living in
this
 area.
thus
, the government needs to focus more
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 controlling the emission of carbon dioxide and other harmful gases.
Secondly
, waste management is
also
 a growing concern in the world. With focusing on producing more non-recyclable products due to their
cost saving
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 factor, the detrimental waste generated after the use of these products can be extremely harmful
for
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 these animals if not
disposed
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 properly.
For example
, polluting the sea with plastic waste has caused
loss
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 in marine life in many countries. so it can be rightfully said that the authorities should prevent
such
 disposal of harmful substances
initially
 in order to save wildlife. To conclude, Though it is necessary to protect the fauna,
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 strongly believe that the government should prioritize resolving the primary factors leading to the need
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conservation
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the conservation
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 of wildlife.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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