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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Human beings have various
life
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 stages that they have to go through. Two of the most important stages are
adulthood
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 and
childhood
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. Some parts of society opine that we make the happiest memories when we are in
childhood
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, whereas some believe
adulthood
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 gives you more freedom and joy to live
life
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, despite greater responsibility.
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 with, youth is a favourite stage of many individuals. The reason is in your adolescence you have no responsibility to take and we use most of our time watching television, playing games and enjoying with friends.
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, the whole family have a lot of affection towards you and they try to fulfil all your demands.
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, they can roam around all day, they can spend on what they want, explore different paths with carefree and most importantly spend valuable time. As we move forward,
adulthood
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 is the
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 stage after
childhood
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, which is a transitional phase in human
life
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. The adult stage not only just brings maturity but
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 responsibility. Youngsters get the freedom of what they want to do. As a result, they can take decisions on their own. Despite its benefits,
adulthood
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 brings a burden to the family too, where your every action will affect your family
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.
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, a grown-up individual has to take major decisions on behalf of his families
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 as overtaking his father's business or get settled in his career and relationship. To summarise, the two sides of the argument having their own benefits. ,
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However
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 after a thorough analysis of both sides, it is easy to say that
childhood
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 is where we spend the best time of our
life
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.
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