Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Human beings have various
stages that they have to go through. Two of the most important stages are
. Some parts of society opine that we make the happiest memories when we are in
, whereas some believe
gives you more freedom and joy to live
, despite greater responsibility.
To begin
with, youth is a favourite stage of many individuals. The reason is in your adolescence you have no responsibility to take and we use most of our time watching television, playing games and enjoying with friends.
, the whole family have a lot of affection towards you and they try to fulfil all your demands.
For instance
, they can roam around all day, they can spend on what they want, explore different paths with carefree and most importantly spend valuable time. As we move forward,
is the
stage after
, which is a transitional phase in human
. The adult stage not only just brings maturity but
responsibility. Youngsters get the freedom of what they want to do. As a result, they can take decisions on their own. Despite its benefits,
brings a burden to the family too, where your every action will affect your family
For example
, a grown-up individual has to take major decisions on behalf of his families
as overtaking his father's business or get settled in his career and relationship. To summarise, the two sides of the argument having their own benefits. ,
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after a thorough analysis of both sides, it is easy to say that
is where we spend the best time of our
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