Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In
this
21st century uses of the internet are tremendously escalated with all age group and it plays a vital role in an individuals life.
Although
many people believe that,
worldwide
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web gives significant data for various topics;
however
, others think that there are a few obstacles to using an excessive amount of internet which may lead to different types of issues.
This
essay will substantiate views in the following paragraph with the relevant examples. To
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with, hyperspace not only provides important information but
also
, it
save
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people's time in multiple ways
such
as
,
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online reading like newspapers, articles even though through internet masses could able to purchase thing online.
For example
, nowadays, children get many
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to do at home so they need to do deep research, collect related photographs along with detailed information, yet
this
is
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extremely
extremaly
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popular way to find something
on
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cyberspace.
In addition
, ARPANET
are
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more usable in the terms of office premises for many reasons like sending emails, doing
ground work
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, as well as for making video calls and so on.
On the other hand
, it is not neglectable the fact that it has few stumbling blocks.
Firstly
, immoderate use of the web may trigger crime like hacking, online
abusing
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, blackmailing together with health issues.
Furthermore
, the survey conducted by the crime branch of the USA published that operating an
internate
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internet
by children faced abuse and blackmailing issues by social media accounts,
besides
, it may
also
lead to eyesight problems at
earlier
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age. To conclude, considering above mentioned points it is evident that, despite getting unrestricted data through cyberspace may create problems but
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do concur with it has more benefits which provide valuable information in many ways
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logically acceptable.
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