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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Since the existence of mankind
women
 play a significant role in the nourishment of
children
.
However
, in
the
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recent
women
's role has changed from us it used to be because, of
this
 young masses have to face a lot of negative influences,
such
 as
,
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 juvenile offending. The crime increasing because
women
 are
work oriented
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 and due to it they can not focus on family issues. To embark, with it is undoubtedly true that
women
's position in the modern world has revolutionised because since user several decade education levels among
women
 has improved.
However
, with
this
 transformation
women
's
rose
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 for their
children
 has
also
 changed because of the huge amount of stress and work lead at job place they can not emphasize their
children
's upbringing.
This
 behaving of their lead their
children
, commit youth crime because
,
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 young
children
 are respected and they can trap by young adults into drug trafficking and alcohol manipulation.
Furthermore
, in
this
fast faced
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 ,world it is need of the time that both men and
women
 should earn to live happy lifestyle but with a word they should
also
 focus on the deeds of
children
. To be more specific, the Internet is something
tha
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that
 keeps
children
 to acquire knowledge and learn some unofficial activities.
Thus
, parents should always keep
on
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 eyes on their
children
's internet history despite being so busy
in
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 work because it is something that
have
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potential
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 to trap
children
im
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in
 cyber crimes.
For instance
, according to a report by
techworld
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, In
India
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 45%
children
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of children
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 become
victim
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a victim
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 of child abuse on
internet
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. In conclusion.
although
women
's role has been changed since
last
 20 years
but
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it does not
signifies
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 that they should any focus on works they have to take their responsibilities seriously because at the early age
children
 are easy
target
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 of trappers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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