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Some people have to find work abroad .they have to leave theirs homes as well as friends. Do the advantages outweight the disadvantage.

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In the contemporary era, there is an argument over an issue that in certain nations , individuals migrate to a plethora of foreign country to find work , but they have to leave
theirs
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 homes as well as their close ones.In my opinion, Despite
of
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having certain merits of
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 trend,
demirits
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demerits
 clearly outweigh the merits On one hand , the masses get the opportunities to learn
culture
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 and traditions of other countries. To elaborate it, if any person
immigrate
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to
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abroad to do jobs , it will play a tremendous role in their life. Due to
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 , they met various local citizens and it is extremely easy for them to learn their culture and traditions.
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, the headline in 'Moscow Time ' revealed that every year Indians move
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abroad for
an altruistic jobs
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,
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 aid them to know their rituals.
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, moving to any foreign nation for a person plays a crucial role.
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 , the folks have to face mental health issues. To elaborate it, since the trend of
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 to any country has rocketed, individuals have to suffer from loneliness
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problem and
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 paves the way to depression, anxiety, tension and so on .
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, according to the survey by 'WHO
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' the French citizens maximum suffer from these mental problems because they cannot leave their family.
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 migrate to abroad has benefits , disadvantages
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cannot be neglected. To conclude, even though immigration to a foreign country assists individuals to learn their rituals, the negative of
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 trend clearly surpasses its merits.it is predicted that in future no one goes abroad to find work.
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