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Technology like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and the Government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss both sides of this argument.

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Nowadays, many tasks are done by the latest technologies
such
 as
robots
 and artificial intelligence to
increase
 the revenues of companies. Despite
this
, there is a drawback most
people
 are unemployed due to the latest
technology
 for
this
 the government should take suitable actions.
This
 essay will discuss both views in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,
technology
 makes our life easier. Now lots of heavy work is done by
robots
. Earlier it was performed manually and
people
 injured by carrying heavy objects.
Robots
 are faster than manforce. Robotics gives efficient and accurate results in term of calculations.
For instance
, In Russia
company
 Texas has observed that with
robots
 their
company
 profit
increase
 by 40% in a single year.
Hence
, the productivity of a
company
 is increased by using
technology
.
On the other hand
,
robots
 or artificial intelligence really affects employment. Many
people
 lost their jobs. Because
robots
 can be run by a skilled person. Consumption of electricity is
also
 increasing in factories. There is another drawback of
robots
 is if there is no electricity
then
 urgent work is not done on time. In
this
 case, productivity is less.
For instance
, where I worked earlier there were hundredth of employees
then
 they introduced two
robots
 and
then
 they remove 20
people
 from a factory. The government should take necessary action so that the main force should not be affected by the introduction of
robots
. To conclude,
technology
 affects positive as well as negative impacts on the work. With
robots
, one can
increase
 the productivity of his
company
 and there are fewer chances of injury.
On the contrary
, there
increase
 in unemployment.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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