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Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future society while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both of view and give your opinion.

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The notion concerning that electronic
robots
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 more
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popular
 seems to trigger a considerable debate. A cluster of like-minded
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voice
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 that in coming days ,
robots
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 may be plays
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indispensable
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 role
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 and everyone's
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taka
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 a dim view
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 it and opine that
robots
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 might be put bad impact on
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public
 lives. The upcoming
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analyse
 both twain side in advance of my view. The
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prominent
 of former views think that
robots
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are very
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help ful
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helpful
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 for
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 in every field . To explain it, due to
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hectic
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schedule
people
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 do not have more time to do home activities because they
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 have to do their
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 properly and
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work
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 so advancement of technology gives birth to more benefits .
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 era , if
people
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 use
robots
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 for daily
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 like they can use
vaccum
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vacuum
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 for dusting ,dishwashers for dishes and so on.
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,
robots
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helps
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alots
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lots
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people
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 can save their precious time for entertainment, family as well as they can enjoy
good
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life
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. Other side echelons think oppositely and voice that no doubt electronic device boon for individuals but every
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 has two sides.
robots
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reduce
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 day to day
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 from their
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elaborate
 it, if they using
every day
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robots
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 for
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 they reduce
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exercise
 it becomes health hazards like
weigth
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weight
 gain as well as they might be not more active as compared to handwork.
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,
robots
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 easier but more difficult because if parents not working for their family
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children
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children
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 never
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 for them it put bad impacts on their
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. At
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, it can be summed up that no
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doubt
 both side have equal arguments but
robots
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everyone's
everyones
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life
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 easier so
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 very
benefical
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beneficial
 for them .

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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