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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycle are banned from the city centre. People are encouraged to use public transport such as buses, taxies and metro on vehicle-free day. To what extent do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 current era of urbanization, many cities follow certain rules about
traffic
 control
such
 as private vehicles are prohibited on some days and
pubic
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public
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 transports are promoted. I am totally agreed with the aforesaid notion and I
also
 believe that it is more beneficial because it helps to alleviate pollution as well as
traffic
congestion
.
This
 essay will elaborate on the same in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the
first
 and foremost important benefit of using public transport by commuters is the protection of the environment and
this
 happens indirectly due to less carbon emission as a smaller number of vehicles run on the road. To exemplify, the report published by the Pollution Control Buro, New Delhi, on 20th June 2020, reveals that the implementation of the rule of banning private cars for 3 days a week resulted in a 60% reduction of carbon emission in the air.
As a result
, a healthy breathable environment was available for citizen.
Moreover
, the reduction of lung infections was
also
 noticed.
Secondly
, as everyone is nowadays using own car for commuting the roads are usually full and creates
a huge
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huge traffic jams
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traffic
 jams.
This
 situation is extremely disturbing for emergency situations like shifting ICU patients or providing
fire
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a fire
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 control team. In my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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, one lady gave birth to a baby in the ambulance itself as the ambulance
which
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apply
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was excruciatingly painful for her as they were stuck in the huge
traffic
congestion
 for almost one hour.
This
 means it is incredibly beneficial to have
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congestion-free
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congestion
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a congestion
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 free commute.
On the other hand
, people may find using public transport inconvenient,
time consuming
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 and tedious but these problems can be addressed by increasing
frequency
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the frequency
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 and quality of public buses and metros. In conclusion, it is obvious that using public transport is incredibly useful as
this
 can provide us safe and
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healthy
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heathy
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healthy
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 environment.
In addition
 to
that
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,that
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 it is
also
 has a great impact
over
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on
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 controlling
traffic
congestion
.
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