In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In many
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countries
, some citizens believe
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large amount of money on building new railway lines to reduce the times to reach different cities. Other sustain that enhance the
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public
trasport
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transport
should be a better way to invest
pubblic
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public
cash. I believe that developing the existing different type of local transport
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a better method to spend
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public
money. On the one hand, have a fast way to move from a city to another is really important for people. In fact, many employees work in a different city than where they live and for
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they pass a lot of hours per day
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a train.
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, new train roads would let people who live in small villages to attend university in important universities even if they are far from the students' hometown.
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the other hand, strengthen local transports should be
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main goal for
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public
administrations.
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,
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investments can
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people
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the use of
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vehicles
with a big impact on the environment in term of less pollution.
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, through the enhancement of existing
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transport
institutions can resolve
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inefficiencies
like the overcrowding of subways and trains and the absence of security. To
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instance
distance
, the
last
year in Rimini the
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public
administration finished the city subways and
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to a general improvement of local services, a decrease of problems and a reduction of traffic in the main roads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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