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Governments spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that the government spends too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree?

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Money
 from taxes and another should be spent not
only
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 correct way but
also
 in naive methods
such
 as education policies and health care. Personally, I strongly agree with
this
 view,
although
 there are opposing view to consider. The various reasons supporting my view will be given throughout
this
 essay. There are many reasons why I tend to agree with
this
 statement.
First
 of all, Using
money
 on public festival leads to corruption.
Also
, the government needs to solve the problems of corruption because there are many areas lacking funding and are underdeveloped. By receiving the
money
 that should be spent on them, these areas can have improved facilities
such
 as education, health care and infrastructure.
Moreover
, festival and carnival waste a large number of cost even though they are public festivals that people can enjoy with them.
Although
 the cons of spending
money
 on public celebration look outweigh the pros, I partly disagree with the statement for a reason. Address
this
, there is an important method to improve finance of the country because of travellers and tourists.
Furthermore
, the festival must have a souvenir and local goods or food for people who love food and collection so
this
 can make a lot of
money
 and jobs for communities which means that it can decrease unemployed problems. To sum up, I agree with if government spend
money
 on local or policy that can improve our country.
Last
 but not least, the more effective policy that government publish the more wealth for the nation.
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