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Scientists believe that computers, not humans, will control cars in the near future. What are the reasons for that? Would this be a positive or a negative development?

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There is no doubt that technology plays an increasingly important role in our daily life.
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 a lot of scientists predict that we will have self-control vehicles in the near future and the cars are driven by humans will disappear.
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 predictions became possible due to the scientific developments in the field of artificial intelligence, active safety
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 systems, the evolution of the Internet and universal availability for global positioning systems. I think it could have positive and negative consequences that I am going to discuss in the following paragraphs.
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 with, I would like to discuss the positive sides. The widespread use of computer-controlled cars could lead to the release of a person from the need to drive a
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. How would be nice to behold the beautiful picture throw the
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 window
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 of the necessity to focus on
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 control? Every person would get more spare time that he could spend on more pleasant things
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 a sleeping or reading
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. The road traffic would become more relaxed and safer. There would be almost no
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 accidents.
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, a lot of people who have driving jobs will lose their jobs.
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, an interesting legal question is springing up before society: if a traffic accident between two cars were being controlled by computers happened, who would have to respond to that? Producer or owner of these vehicles? In conclusion, despite the desire of a lot of people to acquire a self-driving
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, their widespread adoption will bring many social and legal problems.
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