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Convience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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time, in the modern world,
convenience
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food
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 is more and more common with
people
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, which is predicted to change the way
people
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 eat and overwhelm the traditional one in
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food
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the food
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 industry. In my point of view,
convenience
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food
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 might be popular but still not alter the traditional cuisine and
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preparing
 process. As is easily seen
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,
convenience
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food
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 is prevalent because of its features and price.
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, the quickly-cook process is the reason why most
people
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 prefer it. Just adding flavour and boiling, customers could have
tasty
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 meal but
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 save time.
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, it is produced to be cheap, tasty and non-perishable, which is worth considering to buy. Consumers could leave the
food
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 overnight without worrying about the quality and savoury.
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, in terms of
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,
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 can not replace
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tradition due to the fact that the traditional meal ensures
health
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 for
people
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 . Traditional
food
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 has adequate nutrition and not use
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positives
 which is harmful
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health
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 though there is a long complicated method of
food
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 preparation. Following healthy eating, many
people
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 become smart consumers while choosing a diet suitable for the body.
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, the traditional cuisine has fresh and qualified materials than
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 one. In
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industrialization, some
convenience
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 foods are not the same as their advertisements, which do not have
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 origin and some chemicals harmful for
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 as fats. In
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,
people
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 can not control
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the level
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 of calories through the meal when consuming that
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, as
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, a lot of
expenditurers
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expenditures
expenditure
 suffer from obesity. In the developing industrialization of the world, foods are produced increasingly but not be completely safe for
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 so that
people
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 need to estimate and expenditure equally between traditional and
convenience
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food
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 to have good well-being
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • traditional
  • convenience
  • replace
  • methods
  • food preparation
  • agree
  • disagree
  • opinion
  • ease
  • time-saving
  • benefits
  • cultural
  • historical
  • significance
  • concerns
  • health
  • environmental
  • impacts
  • increasingly
  • prevalent
  • eventually
  • popular
  • convenience foods
  • traditional foods
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