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Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#music #language #mankind
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passed by, the means of entertainment
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continuously
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,
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music
 has persisted as one of the most popular.
In addition
, some argue that it has and should continue serving as a tool for communication between regions and cultures. I strongly believe, that even when not speaking the same
language
, people can connect through their
music
.
This
 essay will look at why
music
 has been a connector between nations and generations.
Firstly
, we have to consider that the ability to compose or play an instrument is independent of the
language
 each person speaks. Through their
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 many artists can express and transmit their emotions and feelings. In consequence, they get to connect with others, regardless
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 differences in culture and nationality.
For example
, each year in my country there is a concert
that is
 transmitted widely in the media. Different singers are presented simultaneously in diverse states, with the aim of getting people together and
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 funds for children with cancer.
This
 has demonstrated that
music
 is a shared
language
 in the whole country.
On the other hand
,
music
 has been present since ancient times and reflects part of the culture of a town. It is interesting how despite generations
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, we can always connect by listening to memorable melodies. Maybe, the best example for me is the Mariachi
music
 played in my country. It is a regional genre which we play for festivities, no matter age or origin, when listening to it we immediately get to celebrate.
To conclude
, because of its capacity
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 people connected through boundaries and generations, I agree that
music
 should continue to be considered a universal
language
 for humans.
Submitted by chrisbourlon on

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task response
Provide a more thorough analysis of the arguments for and against the idea that music is a universal language.
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Ensure that the essay follows a clear and logical organization, with each paragraph contributing to the overall argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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