Computers are replacing humans. Do you agree or disagree?

The advent of technology has brought
machines
into our daily life.Due to
this
, there comes a statement that human beings are being replaced by computers.Personally, I can only partially agree with
this
assertion. I will elaborate
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reasons in the following paragraphs. To
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begin
with, it is true that at many places these intelligent
machines
took a stand.
Firstly
, at ATM centres ,
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days people used to stand in a line at a bank to
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money ,but
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these days they just go to an ATM and get the job done.
Secondly
, librarians are storing the books in the form of PDFs in computers and
hence
decreasing their burden of taking care of old books.
For instance
, reports and literature which was
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scanned and saved in a computer at these
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so that they can share these to people's electronic mails if required.
On the contrary
, I have some reasons to opine that these
machines
can not fully take charge at some places.
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of all ,
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even though
we get a lot of information from these
machines
, to understand it clearly, we need an individual like
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to explain it .
Additionally
, automatic
machines
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do not
don't
have common sense and only run on
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set of instructions which is not always
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recommended
.
For instance
, there should be a man to run and execute a program in these
machines
as they cannot do it themselves. To
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conclude
, despite the theory that computers are replacing humans , there are areas where people can only
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.
Hence
, I can only partially agree with the given statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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