Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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From my perspective, I agree that it is
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effective way for
people
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of distinct cultures or ages to connect together via
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whereas I would argue that
music
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also
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will be a fence to bring them together. There is a compelling argument as to why
music
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is taken into consideration as one of
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the factors
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bringing
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together.
To begin
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with, listeners can empathy
cultural
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the cultural
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features of foreigners through
tranditional
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traditional
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.
For instance
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, in the past , foreign
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invariably had negative attitudes to the eating style of Indian when they have used hands to eat.
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, when some traditional eating style
songs
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of the Indian spread widely,
people
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in other countries begin to empathy and accept that it is
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also
a unique eating style.
On the other hand
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, I believe that
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is a barrier to bring them together.
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, some individuals will find it
annoysed
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annoyed
to ideas of some
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composed by
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the composer
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of other cultures. To put it another way, the
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contain ideas which they believe that they
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ideas
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taking
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purposes them.
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, through several
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with violent meanings, it is extremely to the adult to connect the children.
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, due to the majority of children don't be allowed to
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them by their parents, which is popular
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the adults, thereby the adults will make it difficult to connect
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children. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that not only can
music
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connect
people
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together, but it
also
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will be a big barrier to bring them together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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