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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We are all familiar with the effect of fast
food
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 on our body. Eating ample fast
food
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 is greatly injurious to our health. Even it drastically increases our weight. We know that overweight is harmful to our body. Fast
food
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 may seem delicious to most of the person,
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however
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 we should consider
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having a healthy life. To a great
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 fast
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 is popular all around. It is because of its delicious taste but no healthy element. Most
of
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the
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people
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, especially the
people
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 who are young are fond of fast
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.
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, they visit
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the restaurant gradually and eat fast
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 most of their time. I think to minimize the consumption of fast
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, governments should take several steps.
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 putting an increased
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 on
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fast
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food
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 will help to reduce consuming it. The government
also
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 should take the concern to assess the
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 qualities and nutrients of the
food
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. They should put
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tax
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 on the
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 based on the health benefit
the
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foods
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.
Thus
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 restaurant will stop producing fast
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.
Instead
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 of
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 they will try to modify the
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 with proper nutrients and taste.
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 the other hand I think it is necessary to reduce
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tax
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the tax
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 on healthy
foods
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. If that happen
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people
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 will be more concerned about taking
foods
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 with great nutrients.
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, the poor
people
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 who can't pay for the
food
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 according to their needs,
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should get those healthy
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 without
tax
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, I would say that
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 are necessary for living. Eating healthy
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 is necessary to keep our brain and body healthy.
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 we should avoid fast
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, and prone to take healthy
foods
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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