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Children today find it’s difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools. Why do you think causes this problem? What do we need to do to solve this problem?

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It is not uncommon to hear the complaint that children nowadays are easily distracted from what they are supposed to do in class. The factors responsible for
this
 problem and feasible solutions
accordingly
 will be analyzed in
this
 essay. Among all the possible reasons，the excessive application of electronic products in school should bear the blame. Children born and raised in
this
 digital age have been accustomed to keep in touch with the outside world through their smartphones or iPad.
As a result
，various social media and mobile game-APPs bring the world closer to them but dampen their enthusiasm for absorbing knowledge and skills in a traditional teaching environment at school. To expand their attention span in class and solve
this
 problem，there are some measures that need to be taken into consideration. It is advisable for teachers，who usually function as monitors and managers of the class，to set rules about phone use.
For example
，anyone caught using electronic products for non-academic purposes more than three times will be given an “F”in the final exam.
This
 can bring an immediate and tangible outcome within a short time. ,
Furthermore
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，distracting
students
 from screens back to the whiteboard is
also
 a way worth trying. Some activities designed for raising the energy level of
students
 so as to get them better involved in the class can be applied wisely，like role-play，mingling， discussion etc. These kinds of activities convert the traditionally teacher-centred pattern into the student-centred one and
consequently
 win the student’s interest and attention back. In conclusion，the abuse of electronic products in the classroom is the root cause of
students
' attention issues and the responsibility of sparing
students
 from
this
 problem should be taken
seriously
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 consideration.
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