In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or play classical music. Why is it happening? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?
Nowadays, there
are
a downward trend of Change the verb form
is
young
generation intention for classical Correct article usage
the young
music
. In my opinion, I believe that can be explained by the appearance of different new kinds of music
and instrument while a high level of musical required to be able to listening
and understanding the classic one. Change the verb
listen
However
, youngsters should be equiped
some basic Correct your spelling
equipped
knowledges
about it and those who are talented toward classical Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
music
should be invested and developed well.
To begin
with, classical music
and instruments are competed by the modern ones, who are more suitable for the personnalities
and demand of teenagers. Indeed, classical pieces played by pianist or violinist require audiences have a specific level in Correct your spelling
personalities
music
to understand the means of the song. However
, new musical instruments such
as the electric organ, the guitar, the drum ect
. with Correct your spelling
etc
a
various Correct article usage
apply
rythms
and songs with lyrics are composed by Correct your spelling
rhythms
millenials
assists to present directly their strong emotions and thinkings. Change the capitalization
Millenials
Moreover
, to be master an
classical instrument could take years and Change the article
a
a
hard training while a beginner musician needs only a few hours to practice and cover a song Correct article usage
apply
of
Taylor Swift or Charlie Puth. Change preposition
by
Therefore
, there are a lots
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
obstacle
that young people have to deal with when they desire to listen Change to a plural noun
obstacles
or
play classical Change preposition
to or
music
.
Otherwise
, scientic
research pointed out that a melody of Mozart or Beethoven Correct your spelling
scientific
composied
influence positively to the development of children' brain and Correct your spelling
composed
renforce
their concentrate Correct your spelling
reinforce
ablity
. Correct your spelling
ability
Thus
parents are encouraged to let their offspring listen
classical Add the preposition
tolisten
music
in their early years. Besides
juveniles who learn and practicing
classical Change the spelling
practising
music
pocess
can maintain their focus longer than the other. Correct your spelling
process
Moreover
, there are a
several juniors who have passion and be very talented toward Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
such
type of music
, those who are influenced by their family or have strong support by their teacher and got remarkable success in this
field. In reality, young pianists and violinists contribute significantly to develop and raise the
classical Correct article usage
apply
music
in
a new level. Change preposition
to
Thus
they should be encouraged by schoolarship
or reward given by family and authorities.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the number of young people who interest in classical Correct your spelling
scholarship
scholarships
music
plummet
recently. But it is necessary that school present to students beginning classical Change the verb form
plummets
music
cours
and those who have potential must be encouraged to follow Correct your spelling
course
this
ancient sort of music
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