In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or play classical music. Why is it happening? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?

Nowadays, there
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a downward trend of
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generation intention for classical
music
. In my opinion, I believe that can be explained by the appearance of different new kinds of
music
and instrument while a high level of musical required to be able to
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and understanding the classic one.
However
, youngsters should be
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some basic
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about it and those who are talented toward classical
music
should be invested and developed well.
To begin
with, classical
music
and instruments are competed by the modern ones, who are more suitable for the
personnalities
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personalities
and demand of teenagers. Indeed, classical pieces played by pianist or violinist require audiences have a specific level in
music
to understand the means of the song.
However
, new musical instruments
such
as the electric organ, the guitar, the drum
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etc
. with
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various
rythms
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rhythms
and songs with lyrics are composed by
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assists to present directly their strong emotions and thinkings.
Moreover
, to be master
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classical instrument could take years and
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hard training while a beginner musician needs only a few hours to practice and cover a song
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Taylor Swift or Charlie Puth.
Therefore
, there are
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of
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that young people have to deal with when they desire to listen
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play classical
music
.
Otherwise
,
scientic
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scientific
research pointed out that a melody of Mozart or Beethoven
composied
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composed
influence positively to the development of children' brain and
renforce
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reinforce
their concentrate
ablity
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ability
.
Thus
parents are encouraged to let their offspring
listen
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classical
music
in their early years.
Besides
juveniles who learn and
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classical
music
pocess
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process
can maintain their focus longer than the other.
Moreover
, there are
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several juniors who have passion and be very talented toward
such
type of
music
, those who are influenced by their family or have strong support by their teacher and got remarkable success in
this
field. In reality, young pianists and violinists contribute significantly to develop and raise
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classical
music
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a new level.
Thus
they should be encouraged by
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scholarship
scholarships
or reward given by family and authorities. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the number of young people who interest in classical
music
plummet
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recently. But it is necessary that school present to students beginning classical
music
cours
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course
and those who have potential must be encouraged to follow
this
ancient sort of
music
.
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  • Exposure
  • Perception
  • Old-fashioned
  • Elitist
  • Financial investment
  • Competing interests
  • Entertainment options
  • Digital music
  • Video games
  • Social media
  • Cultural understanding
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Affordable tickets
  • Free concerts
  • Music education programs
  • Modern adaptations
  • Collaborations
  • Relatable
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