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Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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There is no denying that
competitiveness
 help
people
 be more confident, more ambitious, etc. It is great excellence for
people
 in most societies if they use it in a rational way but it can be a dangerous trend if
people
 overestimate it. So I think
competitiveness
 influences individuals in several ways. From my perspective,
Competitiveness
 is more positive than negative.
To begin
 with,
Competitiveness
 can create
motivation
 for
people
. When competitive individuals take part in tests or another kind of contest, they meet a lot of
people
 around them who really competent and knowledgeable, and if they want to go ahead among those competitive ones they need to raise more awareness and have enough life skill, because of that they always have the
motivation
 and urged to be
practiced
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 more. So the person who likes competition always has passion and uses that passion to be the greatest
people
, their passion is synonymous with their
motivation
.
Secondly
, competitive
people
 can contribute to the development of companies. With the help of competitive
people
 in the works, the companies will obviously be boosted in economic growth in the long run.
For instance
, companies that relate to high-end fashion, marketing, or more are the highest pressure working environment and the
people
 who compete are
also
 the one that has high-pressure resistance. So they can work without losing working productivity. That obviously a wonderful idea for employers. In conclusion,
competitiveness
 is a positive trend and is an ability that everybody needs, that skill not only helps us gain more amazing job opportunities in the future but
also
 creates lots of
motivation
 for them so that they can work harder.
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