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Many governments spend a lot of money on art. Some people think this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the contemporary era, it generally accepted that
art
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 enriches
society
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 and plays a valuable role in culture and
history
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.
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 to promote the arts organization,
art
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 galleries, and other
art
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-related matters government invest a big amount of
money
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 on it, others believe that hard cash should be invested in public service and a good cause. In my, opinion spending
money
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 on accelerating medical and educational needs is more important than
art
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. There are two main reasons why people think spending
money
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 on artwork is essential.
First
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 and foremost, it represents the culture and
history
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 of the
society
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. As an artist are the one who keeps alive the
history
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 of the
society
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 in their artwork, it’s essential to spend
money
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 on it so that they not only keep motivated but
also
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 encourage new artist.
In addition
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 to
this
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, in the techno ,world everything would be possible with help of technology including
art
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, so to keep gathering attention on real
art
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 it's important to spend some handsome amount on it.
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, Madhubani is a special kind of
art
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 of Bihar, it represents the culture and
history
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 of Bihar. So, to promote the indigenous
art
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 of
society
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 and artist they required government
support
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. There are ,
however
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, some people including me, who think that taxpayers’ hard cash should be invested in public services. As most
art
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 galleries are getting a huge amount of
money
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 from their ticket price, it’s important to invest in accelerating medical
support
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 by the proliferation of staff and technologies.
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, there are more than 5000 tourist visits Delhi
art
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 museum daily by paying $20 ticket price, so the museum itself earn $10000 daily and it looks like it’s more than sufficient to run a museum. Clearly, the government needs to financially
support
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 other public areas which actually required financial
support
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 in order to improve. In conclusion, as
art
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 galleries have other options to generate
money
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 its good to invest it in the area which are accessible by a large number of people and which actually required financial
support
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.

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