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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 email to express my concerns about your
hotel
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 services which we received recently in
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hotel
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.
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, our team members were really impressed by your
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's location because it had amazing mountain views and was so beautiful that we were mesmerized by its architecture and design as well the
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’ dining area was not only clean but
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 hygienic.
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, my staffs were unhappy because they did not find many options on the lunch menu, and they had a lack of vegetarian options. There were only two vegetarian foods one was mixed veg and the second was veg potato curry.
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, it would be great if you could update the lunch menu by including a few more vegetarian items. Apart from that, I want to recommend you add veg biryani which is the most famous recipe in the world. I am thankful for your hospitality, and I look forward to visiting your
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 in the future. Yours faithfully Dalbir

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task achievement
Try to provide a more detailed explanation of why the food was unsatisfactory. Including specific examples or experiences can strengthen your point.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that it flows naturally from one to the next. This will enhance the overall coherence of your letter.
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Your letter has a polite tone, which is important for maintaining professionalism.
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You did a good job in expressing the participants' appreciation for the hotel's location and cleanliness.
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