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In many countries,there is a growing gap between the technical skills of younger people and those over the age of fifty. What problems does this cause, and what solutions could minimise the problems?

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In numerous states, evident is the increasing
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difference between the technical abilities of younger
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 and those who have now reached the age of fifty. The difference, caused by fast and intensive progress, especially technological one, leads to
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different employment of these different generational groups in the working environment. Adults, who are probably more experienced from a practical point of view, are asked for their experience. They have faced many different situations and can solve any problem. Young
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, who have grown up in an increasingly theoretical world in which practice is disappearing, are in demand mainly for managerial roles but are often unable to solve real, practical problems.
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, living in an increasingly technological and computerised world, it is fundamentally important to be able to communicate well using all the media at our disposal,
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 as blogs, social networks, review apps, etc. Young
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, who were born and raised in a technological context, are not frightened by the rapid progress, but rather are able to use the new instruments to communicate with customers, especially young
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, who are the most active ones. Both generational groups,
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, have some strengths and some weaknesses. I believe that the best solution to create a balanced and complete working reality and to give work and possibilities to both worlds is to combine capacities by connecting the worlds of young
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 and adults. So it would be smart to create a partnership between the two age groups by combining skills and strengths.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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