Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Admiration
of media
and sports
personalities
are
gaining increasing popularity among the young Correct subject-verb agreement
is
generation
despite their negative influence. I firmly believe that this
is a negative development. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why blind admiration
of media
and sports
personalities
can lead to many pressing repercussions. The young generation
admires these media
and sports
personalities
because of their public display of wealth and charming lifestyle. Youngsters try to replicate the lifestyle of these personalities
by overlooking their parents
paying capacity. Many celebrities have become an overnight sensation because of their excessive spending capacity. Change noun form
parent's
parents'
Moreover
, while
trying to replicate the same lifestyle, the younger generation
fails miserably and loses handsome money. When these youngsters cannot replicate these personalities
' lifestyles, they develop hatred and indulge in crime, drugs
and get depressed. Correct word choice
and drugs
Also
, it severely affects their mental health. Another example of lousy influence is NFL star, Tom Brady. Tom Brady is a famous football player who has won numerous championships, but last
year he was in the headlines because he was caught deflating air out of footballs before each game to make them easier to catch. Now youngsters all over the world believe that it's perfectly fine to cheat to win a game. Although
humble and down to earth
Add a hyphen
down-to-earth
personalities
do exist, they are a relatively small number. To sum up
, media
and sports
personalities
' admiration
is a negative development because the younger generation
fails to understand that there is a very thin line between admiration
and obsession. Also
, the younger generation
needs to recognize that the media
is deceitful.Submitted by bduriseti211 on
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