Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Bullying in schools is a serious
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raised by most
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parents. It
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the child's physical and mental development.
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the studies grade of the kid. There are various reasons responsible for it. In
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fun of colleagues in
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is always taken as a big
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level of a child plays an important role.
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responsible for it.
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, lenient rules in school encourage some the kids to create trouble for new ones. It has been seen many times that fresh joining suffers a lot. Remedies for the burning
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is to create a strict punishment for the responsible students
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so that in future they should not repeat and it should send
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see that the new admissions must get the proper attention. If they face any
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, feel free to report to
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teacher.
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are already having a specific committee for addressing
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issue
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. I always think that there should be no bullying in school and kids should feel happy to go to school. It should be stopped immediately as it has
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impact on
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psychology. Good students make
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nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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