Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both views. (No opinion)

It is often opined that whether
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is making
people
closer or making them far away. there are thoughts on both
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sides. I will discuss both the postulates along with my rationale associated with
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exemplification in the subsequent paragraph At the outset, nowadays
people
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indulging
more and more in the use of
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. Some
people
reckon that using social sites like
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,
instagram
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and
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making
their
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life easy to contact
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anyone
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any one
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without
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visiting
their house, which helps them to save their time.
For instance
, as per a survey report conducted by the Times of India, 30% of
people
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agreed
that using
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kind of site they saved
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a lot of time which were wasted in
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.
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, utilizing these websites helped them to stay in touch with
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who lived quite far away like overseas or foreign.
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proved beneficial to contact with them because it is not a piece of cake to meet them. To illustrate, a
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published by the
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Airport Authority , stated that they had seen a degrade in the
groth
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growth
after launching of
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WhatsApp
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because
people
prefer to interact
onine
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online
rather than visit.
on the contrary
, many
people
think these social media sites are
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deteriorated
the face to face interaction, owing to
this
people
become less social.
for example
, as per a survey report
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conducted
by the National Social Authority , 60% of
people
had avoided social event as they wanted to spent their time on
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.
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, most
people
opined that
people
find
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online
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separate
them from family and real friends. They isolate themself from everyone and keep
endulging
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indulging
on
internet
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. Which make a deep
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detrimental
effect on their mental health. Quintessentially, as per a survey report published by the National Health Organization, 49%
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perturb and
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due to a lot of use of
internet
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. To conclude, after perusal of aforementioned point it is conspicuous that
internet
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affecting peoples'
life
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on a large scale. It has
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an essential part of everyone's life.
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of
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should be regulated
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strictly
.
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