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It is undeniable that immigration has become a great influence on the society. Each year, more and more people are transmigrating to other countries by leaving their mother land. This essay will discuss why people are immigrating and provide options for the results of immigration.

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To begin
 with, there are two main reasons why
people
 decide to move to other
countries
 in order to get a safe
life
 or to improve their living standard.
In other words
, some
people
 especially suffer the consequence of the local war which lead country to delay improving
of
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safety, education or economic to get a good
life
 in
this
 country.
For instance
,
people
 from Myanmar have become
refugee
 by moving to other
countries
such
 as Thailand, Indian or the US because of the local war in Myanmar.
Moreover
, some
people
 are migrating to Singapore in order to get a great job to support back their family.
Thus
,
people
 are becoming immigrants due to obtaining safety and improving
life
.
However
, sometimes immigration has a negative effect on both immigrants and the destination country.
For example
, most of the
refugee
 is unable to find jobs because of the lack of language skills and hardship in adapting.
Secondly
, all the
refugee
 needs to receive the proper food or medical care and camps for them. That’s why destination
countries
 must run various
refugee
 assistance programs to help those
people
. In conclusion, despite
people
 can get a proper
life
 by immigration, it may not always meet
what
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people
’s expectations.
Hence
, it is vital to consider all possible outcomes for both positive and negative effects before migrating to other
countries
.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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