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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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It is undeniable that
immigration
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 has become a great influence on society. Each year, more and more
people
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 are transmigrating to other
countries
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 by leaving their motherland.
This
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 essay will discuss why
people
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 are immigrating and provide options for the results of
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.
To begin
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 with, there are two main reasons why
people
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 decide to move to other
countries
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 in order to get a safe
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 or to improve their living standard.
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, some
people
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 especially suffer the consequence of the local war which lead the country to delay improving safety, education or economy to get a good
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 in
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 country.
For instance
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,
people
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 from Myanmar have become
refugee
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 by moving to other
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such
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 as Thailand, Indian or the US because of the local war in Myanmar.
Moreover
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, some
people
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 are migrating to Singapore in order to get a great job to support back their family.
Thus
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,
people
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 are becoming immigrants due to obtaining safety and improving
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.
However
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, sometimes
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 has a negative effect on both immigrants and the destination country.
For example
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, most of the
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 is unable to find jobs because of the lack of language skills and hardship in adapting.
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, all the
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 needs to receive the proper food or medical care and camps for them. That’s why destination
countries
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 must run various
refugee
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 assistance programs to help those
people
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. In conclusion, despite
people
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 can get a proper
life
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 by
immigration
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, it may not always meet
people
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’s expectations.
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, it is vital to consider all possible outcomes for both positive and negative effects before migrating to other
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.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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