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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
Recently, Throughout the centuries, transport has been developed surprisingly. ,
Also
 all
car
 is operated by fossil material.
This
 means that it causes many damages to the Earth
such
 as global warming, air pollution.
Then
, society has started to prohibit ride which is burning fossil gas and produce eco-friendly cars. I strongly agree that The cars that burn fossil electricity should be banned in 10 years.
To begin
 with, using fossil
fuels
 causes air pollution around the world, especially in developing countries
such
 as the USA,UK and Korea. It can be lead to be hard for surviving.
For example
, fossil
fuels
 make a lot of dust, which is very dangerous to breathe and to walk.
Thus
 people are better to stop using fossil
fuels
 for themselves.
Moreover
, eventually, destroying the resource of nature will be ended up in Global warming. People start to aware of global warming, which is very harmful to our ecosystem.
besides
,The company destruct the nature for producing the
car
, which is used by fossil ammunition. the all of species is going to extinct in earlier future. Hense, The big countries and government must regulate destroying nature and encourage the company to replace the sustainable automobile. To conclude, If the crowd keep driving the wagon that burns fossil electricity and the company which produce the
car
, the Earth will be disappeared in the future. So, It is most important to protect people's health and to replace sustainable cars.
Finally
, it should be banned
car
 than burn fossil
fuels
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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