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Stress is now a major problem in many countries, what are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it ?

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Nowadays, the responsibilities increased and that leads to
stress
 in the community. There are many various reasons for
stress
.
On the other hand
, we can encourage ourselves to solve and decrease
stress
.
This
 essay will discuss what I consider to be the two main causes of
stress
 and suggest ways to manage it. Indeed,
life
 became demand more work to achieve a safe environment for the family. But with all these works the
stress
 became one of the most global issues.
However
, the
first
 reason for the
stress
 is work for late hours. Working for late hours lead to exhausting body and mind.
As a result
 of that, the family feels unstable
life
.
Also
, the family problems increase.
Secondly
, raising children without help probably make mothers
in particular
 feel
stress
 because mothers give all the time. Even though they need their own time to be able to give more with love. To decrease
stress
 rate on the community in my opinion. Find free time during the day, to do your hobbies or just for relaxation. So, that would restore the body energy. And helps to give more in
life
.
Also
, playing sports every morning source of positive energy for the whole day.
Finally
, healthy food kind of a good reward for the body after a hard day and that will makes people psychologically satisfied with themselves. In conclusion, we can not deny
stress
 could lead to a negative
life
. So, find real solutions help people to be more productive and happier.
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