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Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The goals for every individual always are different, like having their own
business
 or grouping up in the company for a better
posicion
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position
. When those populations decide to have their own
business
, it is because they have some capital, good ideas and the main reason they have the
challenge
 for a new start. The start will be a
challenge
, for that
reason
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,reason
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 it is important that people have the knowledge about their new
business
, have a market study and do the things step by step. It allows the people to have better control for the new
challenge
. For their own
business
, some individuals prefer to work in parallel before doing the big step, others prefer to have the big
challenge
, if it is good or not, it will depend on every
situacion
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situation
.
However
 the history of the big companies, they will dare and change forever their lives and the lives of others.
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