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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the fast-paced world that we currently live in, innovation happens everywhere and people tend to venture from one place to another. Nowadays, there are many
professionals
 like engineers and those from the medical field, are moving from underdeveloped
countries
 to a more developed nation in order to work. Some individuals thought that well-off
countries
 are stealing these
professionals
 from the scarce
nations
.
Nevertheless
, I disagree with the latter as I believe that
this
 kind of changes is just part of the natural movement around the globe. Many citizens from diverse underdeveloped
countries
 are migrating to the rich nation because of low remuneration in their own country of origin. To exemplify, Nurses from the Philippines are migrating to developed
nations
 like UAE, United Kingdom, Canada and many more because these
countries
 could offer five to ten folds of what they were receiving in their country.
As a result
,
professionals
 can live a life better than what they have back home.
Moreover
, well-off
nations
 could offer citizenship to a lot of
professionals
.
This
 means that they could take with them their family back home and live with them while they are working. Rich
countries
 could
also
 offer free education to young children of expatriates which is a great advantage ,especially that education is not free in all underdeveloped
nations
.
Hence
, more workers are enticed to seek job abroad rather than staying in their own country earning less than they deserve. In conclusion, I disagree that rich
countries
 are stealing talented
professionals
 from poor
countries
 as
this
 is just a part of modernization and natural changes in the work environment due to many reasons.
Submitted by Rachelle Rotcaf on

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