Many people are copying famous celebrities from magazines and TV. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a good idea to copy celebrities?

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Across the world, some

people

try to imitate different

celebrities

This

could be for the superficial

that is

people

today. In my opinion, I believe that can be negative try to be like a famous

people

especially because youngers want to have fancy items without thought the consequences.

Firstly

, It is considered by many that famous

people

are good for our young person, but there are other

thing

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things

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that is

better imitate.

For instance

, in my country,

lastly

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,lastly

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people

are more superficial than ten years ago

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apply

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because many time is

importan

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important

buy

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the

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last

iPhone that

help

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helps

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other

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others

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this

is a consequence of advertisement and Tv shows.

Although

important

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importantly

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mentioned

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that there are

celebrities

that try to learn thing like stay against bullying.

Secondly

, It is often thought that if you are like

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a celebrity

celebrities

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celebrities

you can be accepted by your near

people

, but

this

can be bad for our lives because there are

many

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inequality

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inequalities

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, if we speak about salary, is a big problem because

people

don't have enough money to pay luxury.

For example

, in my city is more essential

buy

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to buy

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a good car

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celebrities

show on tv like help other

people

Furthermore

, all

people

are different with different qualities and skills

that

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are

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better be distinct. In conclusion, I can say

that is

a bad idea

try

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to try

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to copy

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apply

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celebrities

because we can have

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the

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worst world, superficial and we can

contribuited

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contribute

contributed

to other more important things like help others than try to waste money in

lastly

items that in tv show the

celebrities

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