Many people are copying famous celebrities from magazines and TV. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a good idea to copy celebrities?

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people

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try to imitate different

celebrities

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could be for the superficial

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people

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today. In my opinion, I believe that can be negative try to be like a famous

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especially because youngers want to have fancy items without thought the consequences.

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, It is considered by many that famous

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are good for our young person, but there are other

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that is

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better imitate.

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, in my country,

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lastly

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people

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are more superficial than ten years ago

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because many time is

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important

buy

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last

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iPhone that

help

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other

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is a consequence of advertisement and Tv shows.

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important

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mentioned

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that there are

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that try to learn thing like stay against bullying.

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, It is often thought that if you are like

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a celebrity

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celebrities

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you can be accepted by your near

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, but

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can be bad for our lives because there are

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inequality

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, if we speak about salary, is a big problem because

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don't have enough money to pay luxury.

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, in my city is more essential

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a good car

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celebrities

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show on tv like help other

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, all

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are different with different qualities and skills

that

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better be distinct. In conclusion, I can say

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a bad idea

try

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to copy

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celebrities

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because we can have

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worst world, superficial and we can

contribuited

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contribute

contributed

to other more important things like help others than try to waste money in

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items that in tv show the

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Varied vocabulary

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